#1
The verses are a reaosnable speed, but the chorus is said slow, one word at a time.
In the melodic metal genre.

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Permit
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I cling, the pole,
that's comforting
I caress, the ropes
that bound me in
Look to, the glass
That light floods in

Tears
Stream
Life's
Dream
Real?
Scream

Lonliness, is a terrible thing
But who, can we trust
Without surrendering

Our Hearts

Tears
Stream
Life's
Dream
Real?
Scream

I cling, the pole,
that's comforting
I caress, the ropes
that bound me in
Look to, the glass
Imagine escaping
#3
i agree with the one word lines needing more depth... i know the genre isn't known for depth... but i think it would really help this piece... keep the same idea for the chorus if you want, but make them more sentence like.

not bad verses though.

good job.