#1
my tear ducts swell the most-est while your away,
i've happened to cry on other days,
I wish i could of said how much i miss,
your hair in my face,
please don't take it away,

I know it's not a crime to beleive,
that one plus one means you and me,
i know not to be ashamed of my beleifs,
cause i'm still in make beleive,

just give me a smile,
a means of happiness,
something that I haven't felt before,
in case of fire please break this door,

into the other,
the only other way i escape,
the day is in a new place,
where lovers can't be found,
where my hearts not on the ground,
where lushes play all day,
to change their ways,

i'm not the only,
i'm not the only one,
i'm not the only,
person who feels this way,
i'm not the only,
i'm not the only one,
i'm not the only,
person who can't escape,

give it all to,
give it all away,
just for second chance,
to make my day!
#2
Quote by lambofgodfold
my tear ducts swell the most-est while your away,
i've happened to cry on other days,
I wish i could of said how much i miss,
your hair in my face,
please don't take it away,

I know it's not a crime to beleive,
that one plus one means you and me,
i know not to be ashamed of my beleifs,
cause i'm still in make beleive,
just give me a smile,
a means of happiness,
something that I haven't felt before,
in case of fire please break this door,

into the other,
the only other way i escape,
the day is in a new place,
where lovers can't be found,
where my hearts not on the ground,
where lushes play all day,
to change their ways,

i'm not the only,
i'm not the only one, (Rape Me plz??)
i'm not the only,
person who feels this way,
i'm not the only,
i'm not the only one,
i'm not the only,
person who can't escape,

give it all to,
give it all away,
just for second chance,
to make my day!

the underlined lines need work but good over all plz crit my song
#3
the who are the only ones i like trashing their instruments..
#4
I like the second stanza, it really captures the song. But then it gets kinda sloppy and repetitive towards the end. I think it has really good potentiol though, and could be an amazing song if you cleaned it up a bit.