#1
Something hit me last night and I was able to put some lyrics to the verse riff I came up with last week. I added on a chorus and a little break and this is what I have so far it's about 2 minutes long. I appreciate all comments but I already know that my voice isn't anything great. Any other feedback would be absolutely nice and I'll def try to return the favor if you give a link. Thanks and hope you enjoy.

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#2
hey man, thanks for the feedback on my song.

and here's mine on yours:
i really like the guitar, very awesome guitar work
and your vocals sound different [not a bad way]
i really like the chorus, it caught my attention.

keep it u, good stuff!
#3
This is cool. That is what I was talking about when I said the rap with the acoustic guitar thing earlier. This song is really good. The chorus and the part right after the chorus is awesome. The main guitar riff thing in this song is so cool. This is a great song. It's like if everlast made insanely cool music. Who cares if your voice isn't the greatest ever? This song was awesome. It is probably one of the best songs i've critted on this website. Mind critting mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522091
#5
hey man...this is really cool....i love the rap(pish) verse...the chorus is great too, could be very beautiful, but if i could say...i know you said your voice isnt great, but you really could kick this songs ass, especially in the chorus, you just cant be afraid to go for it...you're almost there on every note, you just seem a bit timid...and if you got some "ooh's" in the background or something it would be awesome(r)....haha also reminds me a lot of the chili peppers...you got a good thing goin here, it's a great start!

mind checking out my new one?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=533488

thanks man
#6
Quote by jables23092
hey man...this is really cool....i love the rap(pish) verse...the chorus is great too, could be very beautiful, but if i could say...i know you said your voice isnt great, but you really could kick this songs ass, especially in the chorus, you just cant be afraid to go for it...you're almost there on every note, you just seem a bit timid...and if you got some "ooh's" in the background or something it would be awesome(r)....haha also reminds me a lot of the chili peppers...you got a good thing goin here, it's a great start!

mind checking out my new one?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=533488

thanks man


ya thanks and what you mentioned about my voice i have the same thoughts as well. and i am planning on putting in some oohs or more lyrics at the break after the chorus. thanks that felt good to read im gonna go check out your stuff
#7
hmm surprisingly i kinda enjoyed that. i've gotta agree with everyone else. the guitar's pretty solid and the chorus brings it together. actually the chorus stands out really well. i know it's a demo but at the end there it seemed like it was gonna go into a really nice break. anyways, good job on it.

pls. check mine out: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=532270
#8
Quote by somewhat_here
hmm surprisingly i kinda enjoyed that. i've gotta agree with everyone else. the guitar's pretty solid and the chorus brings it together. actually the chorus stands out really well. i know it's a demo but at the end there it seemed like it was gonna go into a really nice break. anyways, good job on it.

pls. check mine out: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=532270


Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the chorus, I actually wrote it directly after finishing the first verse and I felt like it fits right in. I'm def gonna go back later this week and try to add some stuff in there like a nice break and solo after the end of it now so thanks for saying that as well cuz I feel the same way. I'll check yours out now.
#10
Your voice is better in this, it is quite a good song, I enjoyed listening to it, the rap/acoustic thing is a good idea. If you have the money hire a studio for an hour or two and record this with better quality because it's worth doing.

Of course bad quality won't stop a song for being good, it just means it sounds more professional.

I love the intro, in fact the whole song.

Crit mine?https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=533877
.Brand New.Bright Eyes.This Will Destroy You.

THRRRRRRRREADKILLER!
#11
Thanks a lot. Yeah better quality would def be great I'm just low on funds on getting the equipment for it at the moment. Your feedback is all great, though.
#12
I really like the entusiastic yet raw sound of the guitar. The tone fit the song perfectly, not to mention that the actual playing was incredibly well. I like it when someone knows there limits on guitar and doesn't just throw some random sweep picking excercise in the middle, not to say that this is the most complicated thing you can play by any means. But you can tell that that type of playing comes very natural to you and you don't have to show off to prove anything.
#13
Quote by elemental_d
I really like the entusiastic yet raw sound of the guitar. The tone fit the song perfectly, not to mention that the actual playing was incredibly well. I like it when someone knows there limits on guitar and doesn't just throw some random sweep picking excercise in the middle, not to say that this is the most complicated thing you can play by any means. But you can tell that that type of playing comes very natural to you and you don't have to show off to prove anything.


Thank you very much, man. I share the same feeling. Most of my most favorite riffs/songs/my stuff/whatever are pretty easy to play but they sound so awesome and great and better than something else where they intend to make it sound complicated just to make it sound more impressive to play. I don't think that's what music is about. Thanks for your comments I appreciate it.
#14
Thanks for the feedback on mine.

The guitar was really catchy but the vocals sounded alittle flat to me. But the overall impression of that song was good, made me feel like I was sitting next to a beach actually.