#1
C4C and all that jazz, just post a link. Basically, this piece is a hatchling and I need some critical direction - what to do, what not to do, just some feedback. What chords would you naturally put to this (or melody)? Where could it harmonically go as the song picks up? Thanks in advance.

Style: A slow rock song about personal growth that picks up into a moderate rock song. (This is just the beginning.)

As the sun lifts off a new horizon,
where will you be found?
A new year's just beginning,
but my last leaf's hit the ground.

It's the winter of my life,
the season's finally come
And since I'm at the bottom,
my only direction is up.

My endeavors are falling like snow flakes,
Worthy but just out of reach.
But if I so happened to catch one,
It'd melt before I could think.

It's the winter of my life,
the season's finally come
And since I'm at the bottom,
my only direction is up.
#2
I can't really find much to criticise about it, it's very good.

I liked the way you used the seasons and the weather as clever metaphors. As far as I could tell, this piece was about failure/dying?

My only criticism:
One line that I just felt broke the flow and added very little was 'my only direction is up'... I'm not sure how you could change it, maybe 'up is the only way to go'. I don't know why but it just doesn't work in my head.


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