#1
This is my band, we recorded a song the other day, it's not fully finished, bit are missing. C4C

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Note: I'd also like to say after the chorusy bit the "oooh" and "ahhh" were just messing...That's not serious
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#2
the guitar makes a lot of mistakes in the intro and i don't actually like the transition from clean to hard.It isn't like a song that would make me fan of your band
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#3
i like the style, the metal part isnt bad, you need the guitar to be a bit louder. oh, for the heavier part, that is the part that isnt screaming, mebbe work on the vocals a little ( just a bit of tweaking) good otherwise
EDIT: work on the transition too
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i like the style, the metal part isnt bad, you need the guitar to be a bit louder. oh, for the heavier part, that is the part that isnt screaming, mebbe work on the vocals a little ( just a bit of tweaking) good otherwise
EDIT: work on the transition too


Yup, I wasn't happy with the vocals, but I had to do it in one take, and couldn't go through it again.
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#5
good drum tone. The intro bit has a good dark feel to it, and i dig that. The transition into the metal bit is a bit rough though, and the guitar does need to be quite a bit louder after that transition. Also the clean vocals need to be a less present in the heavy bits. I can totally dig the screaming though. Keep it up, and keep on rockin
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#6
Yeah if you did the vocals in a couple takes I think it would be much cooler. The transition could be a little smoother, but I like the heavy part. the singing in it is better, too. The screaming is pretty insane and heavy, but it's what you're going for, so good job. I like the part after the chorus because it sounds kind of like Disturbed. This is pretty cool. It could be recorded a little better, but I liked it. I think this could be made into a really good song with just a little work because it is already good. The guitar solo is pretty good, but it has a few mistakes and this song probably calls for a more shred solo with tapping and sweeping anyway. good job, though. keep it up. mind critting mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522091