#1
Hey, this is the first time that I've posted anything here. This is one of my first songs that I've completed with lyrics and music. I should be recording it soon, with 1 acoustic guitar, 1 electric, bass and drums and vocals .The chorus is going to be distorted and the rest is clean eccept the solo of course. I hope you like it.

Cold Wind

In the cold is sit and wait
Reminding me that I'm to late
I tried so hard to change her ways
But I lost her to an another
Now I sit her without my lover

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Ashes of my love

Now I sit here in my regret
Her laughing voice I can't forget
The voice that echoes in my dreams
A wild horse that you can't tame
Wondering if we ever felt the same

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Ashes of my dreams

Tried so hard to reach today
Close my eyes, let go yesterday
Wandering in my troubled dreams
Open my eyes make them see
Blowing wind please let me be

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Al my tears of yesterday
#2
Just for the future please read the FAQ regarding titles.

I've edite dit this time.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
#3
in the cold is sit and wait" I sit and wait"
Reminding me that I'm to late
I tried so hard to change her ways
But I lost her to an another
Now I sit her without my lover

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Ashes of my love

Now I sit here in my regret
Her laughing voice I can't forget
The voice that echoes in my dreams
A wild horse that you can't tame
Wondering if we ever felt the same

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Ashes of my dreams

Tried so hard to reach today
Close my eyes, let go yesterday
Wandering in my troubled dreams
Open my eyes make them see
Blowing wind please let me be
i would take out this whole verse, uve used most of it already, first line doesnt make sense to me,u mentioned letting go yesterday in chorus, dreams u mention in past verse, and blowing wind b4

The cold wind blows away
the ashes of my yesterday
Cold wind blows away
Al my tears of yesterday


all in all, its decent, i couldnt find 2 much wrong, its just one of the pieces were theres nothing u'd change, but their just decent.

leave a short crit on 'heart frequency' in my sig if u could