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so i haven't written a song in a long time..so here we go hope you like it...if you do..or if you don't..be sure and give me some feedback =]

(it's a working title...i just wrote it a second ago)
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and it was all my fault
i confess
i was blinded by the
big city lights
and the uptown girls
with looks that could kill
and lips like needles
so watch out now
i'm not too sure
i might just dive
right into this
one more time
for old times sake
lets just do this
hold on tight
and don't look back
tonight is for me and you
for me and you
just me and you


and i've already pulled the trigger once tonight
and i'll do it again i swear i will
and i probably just sparked another fight (tonight)


and i hate it
i hate it so bad
i can't take it
i can't do this tonight
and im through
im already over you
so just turn around and bat your eyes to some other fool
with all the right lines and all the right moves
at all the right times i aint no fool
i don't need you
and i don't want you
get away from me
get away from
get away from me
get away


and i've already pulled the trigger once tonight
and i'll do it again i swear i will
and i probably just sparked another fight (tonight)
and no i won't just talk it through with you
and no i won't i don't want you
please stop doing this
stop looking at me
i can't do this
please don't let me
i can't do this
please don't let me
i pray i won't do this
not tonight
please don't let me
not tonight
my gear--
PRS Tremonti SE
Squire Strat
Yamaha FG730S Acoustic
Gibson SG
BOSS ME-50 Multiple Effects
Marshall MG100HDFX/MG412 Half Stack
#2
haha... after reading this i got really depressed
it wasnt fun to read.. and it was pretty straight forward
maybe next time you could use a lill more imagery

do you already have a melody in mind?
Boo!