#1
I really need some crit on this. It's not a full song, just part of one(haven't written the rest), but just tell me which areas need improvement especially on the lead melody. I'm going to add more "sections" to it when I get the inspiration.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=667898


edit; the band name is just there cuz it had to be something there, and that's what crossed my mind first.
#3
yeah i knew the bends sucked, I'm just gonna take em out when i do the final one. They sounded good when I played it , but when i went back and listened to it i cringed a little.
#4
don't take them out, just make them fuller. i usually try to stay away from bends in my clean tone though. it never sounds right to me lol
Too cool for a signature.
#5
i have to say i actually felt connected with that. i was imagining some diff chord changes later on in the verse if that is gonna be your verse. but i really felt the relaxed honest feel to it. u just need a banging chorus to make it a great song and see what else you can do with it but thats def a great start good job. if u incorporate lyics in it the right way it can be a great song.

u mind listening to mine and leaving some feedback: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=532900
#6
Yeah...same thing w/ the bends, but this is a good, laid back song. A good bass part and some light drums (quiet crashes or those things where they use the weird sticks to make kind of ambient cymbol shhhhhhhhhh noises would sound great or maybe some brushes). The lead was relaxing, too. I think you could make this into a really cool song. Are you adding vox, too? Mind critting mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522091