#1
Hey there everyone, I just made this a few minutes ago and thought some criticism would be interesting. Please be nice.

Push comes to shove
Just as I'm damned by my own actions
I wonder what will happen
They'll all have different reactions

I can't think and I can't move
I hurt me knowing that I will
It feels like I will bleed
Without knowing the need

I start to see a different vision
No longer the same tradition
It scares me so
But how else will I know?

You see I am selfish
I deserve my pain
I leave them all standing there
Reflecting in the rain

I never meant to be,
This terrible burden
Because of the recent
Her heart is no longer lucent
#2
to be honest.. for me it wasnt all that special.. but as you said its a song so maybe you can make it sound catchy
Boo!
#4
I liked it, man. The rhyme scheme was weird at first, but after I read it over, it sounded good. Good work, much better than I can do.
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