#1
This is something that i wrote - the verse runs on a really fast melody and then the chorus runs slow chords.. i have only written one verse - its work in progress but some feedback would be appreciated..peace out

Verse 1 - Quick beat
She runs to the water,
then she lets her hair down,
and she dives down deep.

To forget her troubles,
she dives down deep
and she swims and swims.
(quick word before chorus)
There she goes

Chorus - slows right down - different tune
Who are they?
How can they?
Are you satisfied yet?


well yeh thats all i got so far - but once i tab it out i will put music up here so u can play it urself to hear it.
Last edited by aim33_28 at Feb 26, 2007,
#2
It's good, but it needs more than one verse. It's way too short. Good start though.
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