#1
This is a song for my band, Snakebite Suicide, thrash. This song is heavily influenced by Sepultura, bit of Foo Fighters in there (

Here goes:

RIFF A - VERSE 1

Seemless Motivation
Crushing Cohabition
Useless Information
Deadbeat Occupation
We see no revalation

Bullshit Education
Hardbeat Degridation
No-Brain Administrations
There are no more relations
Society's Castration

No need for Explanation...
NO MORE!!!

RIFF B - CHORUS

We wore it out
Lands laid to waste
Grief, death and famine
can you see?
The engine coming closer
See the dead no hoper
Torn and ripped to a thousand seas!

RIFF C - VERSE 2

Smashed out, beat down and hurried
All hope of revalation...**** TO IT!
Give me some truth
Your'e lying through your teeth
but no...
NO MORE!!!

Solo

RIFF D - VERSE 3

Can you see this wrath thats in my face
Do you only stand there with mouths agape
You've cut our lives, murder and rape
Wait and see, i'll ****ing escape

Yeah?

CHORUS

We wore it out
Lands laid to waste
Grief, death and famine
can you see?
The engine coming closer
See the dead no hoper
Torn and ripped to a thousand seas!

We need help with this tidying up, so it flows better, yet still has the same idea.

Up to any help from anyone who likes to write lyrics

cheers
#2
One thing that has always pissed me off was the majority of political Punk. First, punk rockers have neither the background nor common knowledge of politics to preach anything. Second, throwing together a slew of political words, phrases, etc. does not have any substance.

Seemless Motivation
Crushing Cohabition
Useless Information
Deadbeat Occupation
We see no revalation

Bullshit Education
Hardbeat Degridation
No-Brain Administrations
There are no more relations
Society's Castration


This whole first verse was just hard for me to get through without cringing. If there were some way you could elaborate on all of these two word sentences than maybe it would be cohesive, but these are just as many words as you can think of that have "ation" at the end, and for this, I gather nothing from this piece.

I assume that this is political. Only problem is that I don't know what you're ranting about.
Poor advice.
#3
its about an evil ruler in a fictional medieval land

hence "lands laid to waste"

and the rapeage...george bush isnt a rapist...so i hear.

and this aint punk thanks
#4
Quote by stellar_legs
One thing that has always pissed me off was the majority of political Punk. First, punk rockers have neither the background nor common knowledge of politics to preach anything. Second, throwing together a slew of political words, phrases, etc. does not have any substance.

Seemless Motivation
Crushing Cohabition
Useless Information
Deadbeat Occupation
We see no revalation

Bullshit Education
Hardbeat Degridation
No-Brain Administrations
There are no more relations
Society's Castration


This whole first verse was just hard for me to get through without cringing. If there were some way you could elaborate on all of these two word sentences than maybe it would be cohesive, but these are just as many words as you can think of that have "ation" at the end, and for this, I gather nothing from this piece.

I assume that this is political. Only problem is that I don't know what you're ranting about.

i didnt even understand 75% percent of the words in that first verse
when im with you, there's nothing I wouldn't do, i just wanna be you're only one. im gasping out of straws, taken aback by what i saw that night before when we were all alone...