#1
Verse 1:

Time After Time..
It's Always The Same Old Thing..
Leading The Way Back To The Beginning..
That Never Starts For Us..

We Reflect On The Pain..
That Seems Is Only Felt Within Ourselves..
What It's Like I'll Never Tell...
And It's All I Can Bare To Be Silent..

I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down...

Chorus:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..

Verse 2:

To Open Up..
Could Erase Every Last Detail..
I've Risked Too Much To Have This Fail..
And I Can't Reach Heights To Collapse...

To Finally Say..
The Real Meaning Behind My Words..
Ends In All Or Nothing..
Way Too Fearful Of What May Be Heard..

I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down...

Chorus x 1:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..

I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down... (x2)

Chorus x 1:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..
#2
I like it. It was maybe a little cliche in spots, but it was still good. I like the second verse the best, I think.
#3
Quote by TheRockerDude15
Verse 1:

Time After Time..
It's Always The Same Old Thing..
Leading The Way Back To The Beginning..
That Never Starts For Us..
I liked this line a lot. Nothing here.
We Reflect On The Pain..
That Seems Is Only Felt Within Ourselves..
What It's Like I'll Never Tell...
And It's All I Can Bare To Be Silent..
This sounds the same strain as the first, but maybe could be worded differently. Maybe
We Reflect On A Pain
Seeming As If Only Felt Within Ourselves
Etc...

I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down...
I like this part
Chorus:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..
Yet again some word changes would sit better with me
It's Better than To Face Truth
The Reason etc.

Verse 2:

To Open Up..
Could Erase Every Last Detail..
I've Risked Too Much To Have This Fail..
And I Can't Reach Heights To Collapse...
Flawless in my opinion
To Finally Say..
The Real Meaning Behind My Words..
Ends In All Or Nothing..
Way Too Fearful Of What May Be Heard..
Touching. I like
I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down...

Chorus x 1:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..
I like this second one like this just to switch it up a bit
I Dont Wanna Send It All Crashing Down... (x2)

Chorus x 1:

I Need To Speak..
But A Mouth Cant Define..
The Hearts Meaning..
And Its Killing Me Inside..
For Only Lies To Reach Your Ears..
Is Better Off Than To Face Facts..
The Reason It's Been Hiding All These Years..
You Just Need To Trust Me..
Forget It All And Forget Everything..
Because Its Hard To Not Say Anything..
Yet again refer to the chorus edits from the first time



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