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#1
ok my stupid little brother
has a stupid little crush
on a stupid little girl
so he wrote this stupid poem
for the stupid girl

so please tell me what you think about it

here it is


i tried to express my feelings
in every what i can
i tried to wright a song for you
but the words could never form
i tried to wright a simple poem
but i really sucked at that
i tried to make you like me back
but that did not work at all
i tried to tell you every thing my self
but that definitely did not work
so here i am all out of ideas
not knowing what to do
then all i did was think of you
and all those thought grew and grew
and i thought of what i do best
which is nagging and complaining
so here i am righting you a letter
because nothing has worked better
i feel the way i feel
and know one can tell me different
this letter is just to reel
and i feel like this is distant
now i have a letter
a letter of complaint
because nothing worked better
and i think i have gone insane
and now when i think of you
these words are running through my brain
how can i express my feelings
with out embarrassing my self by singing
so i will try this on for size
and all i am going to do is try
just to have something to do
i think this will work
or i will become a big fat jerk
so tell me this Naomi
what will you tell me
is this a wright way to express my self
or will i through this in the trash
and find one million ways to embarrass my self
and wright all of them down in this
i tried list
so what do you say?

to Naomi

from Gavin
You Say it i play it
#2
You expect me to read that?
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#3
I say the title of the thread is redundant.


Oh yeah...and poetry blows.
#4
Omg... I got embarassed just by reading that. Tell him life isn't like hollywood movies and that that is going to get him a restraining order.

Also, it's spelt "write" not "wright".
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#7
Poetry doesn't blow. But that piece is just pathetic.
* casualty01 slinks away, sad, with a paddle in one hand and a strap on in the other.
#8
His spelling is horrid and his "poem" is more like a note.
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#9
So what is the point of this? Your brother wrote a poem for someone. How does this affect you? His life, not yours. At least he's out there trying to get girls as opposed to you who are whining on the internet. This is probably just a cry for attention, you want us to pity you for not being able to get someone to date you. If it makes you feel any better, you can laugh at him when he gets rejected for failing at writting this 'poem'.
Last edited by Embodiment at Feb 28, 2007,
#12
you know Naomi spelt backwards is I Moan, tell him to include that
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#13
Kill your little brother
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#14
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+1

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#15
my little stupid brother read the replies
and thanks for agreaing with me

oh maby a positive thought is in order
You Say it i play it
#18
your brother did it... right....
"Guitarmen, wake up and pluck wire for sound, let 'em hear you play"
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#19
Quote by Embodiment
So what is the point of this? Your brother wrote a poem for someone. How does this affect you? His life, not yours. At least he's out there trying to get girls as opposed to you who are whining on the internet. This is probably just a cry for attention, you want us to pity you for not being able to get someone to date you. If it makes you feel any better, you can laugh at him when he gets rejected for failing at writting this 'poem'.


Wooooooooooooooooo.

Threadstarter, get a life.
#21
The threadstarter obviously wrote this.
Guitarrist living in the Kitchener/Waterloo area and looking to join a band.
#22
Quote by FEDS-91
I say the title of the thread is redundant.


Oh yeah...and poetry blows.


wow dude, do you not listen to lyrics? I say poetry is amazing.
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#24
all right

yes my bro has some balls for wrighting it

but i have a girl and i did not write a poem about it

im just getting advise for him by other people

and also just to tel you

i is going to get so schooled by his freinds if they find out

so if you tell him "i tell him"

so i am trying to look out for him
You Say it i play it
#25
Quote by .g,n,r.
you know Naomi spelt backwards is I Moan, tell him to include that


giggity giggity


Seriously though, beat your brother's ass for being such a tool.
#26
Quote by AdioDistruction
all right

yes my bro has some balls for wrighting it

but i have a girl and i did not write a poem about it

im just getting advise for him by other people

and also just to tel you

i is going to get so schooled by his freinds if they find out

so if you tell him "i tell him"

so i am trying to look out for him


Are you honestly *that* stupid?
Guitarrist living in the Kitchener/Waterloo area and looking to join a band.
#29
Quote by Kensai
Omg... I got embarassed just by reading that. Tell him life isn't like hollywood movies and that that is going to get him a restraining order.

Also, it's spelt "write" not "wright".


dude, yeah life isnt like that movies, BUT girls like it when it is. So writing a poem (no matter how corney) make them be like awww its so sweet.

if you ask me, your brothers gunna score.
#30
Quote by Smoothie
The threadstarter obviously wrote this.


come on, he's so cool, and he's brother it's just an stupid kid that sucks at poetry


yeah righ, his brother
#31
maybe stay out of your brother's business?
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#32
Quote by deluxity
come on, he's so cool, and he's brother it's just an stupid kid that sucks at poetry


yeah righ, his brother


Agreed. Threadstarter, first off, learn to spell. Second off, if you give it to her, she will probably look at you and go awe I'm sorry but I don't think about you like that, and then make a mental note in her head to avoid you and start thinking you are a loser. The best way to get with a girl is to do a lot of heavy flirting, not by sharing your feelings. It's what I have learned in my 3 years of high school, if nothing else. If she doesn't flirt back, then she doesn't like you, learn to deal with it. Sharing your feelings will not help and it won't make it any better. Believe me I know.
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#33
yeah im thinkin you wrote that
but if you didnt whatever its not that bad the girl will like it
#34
Quote by emf810
dude, yeah life isnt like that movies, BUT girls like it when it is. So writing a poem (no matter how corney) make them be like awww its so sweet.

if you ask me, your brothers gunna score.


*bangs head against wall*
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#35
he wrote a letter to Naomi Watts? he better not get his hopes for a replie back, she's very busy women

#36
Quote by Kensai
*bangs head against wall*


Hey for the first time since I have ever been in a discussion involving you in these forums I actually agree with you.

*also bangs head against wall*.
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#37
Quote by AdioDistruction
ok my stupid little brother
i tried to express my feelings
in every what i can
i tried to wright a song for you
but the words could never form
i tried to wright a simple poem
but i really sucked at that

...

so tell me this Naomi
what will you tell me
is this a wright way to express my self
or will i through this in the trash
and find one million ways to embarrass my self
and wright all of them down in this
i tried list
so what do you say?


HMMMMMM

Quote by AdioDistruction
all right

yes my bro has some balls for wrighting it

but i have a girl and i did not write a poem about it

im just getting advise for him by other people

and also just to tel you

i is going to get so schooled by his freinds if they find out

so if you tell him "i tell him"

so i am trying to look out for him


Such a thoughtful guy... Looking out for his little brother.
Guitarrist living in the Kitchener/Waterloo area and looking to join a band.
#38
if i wanted to read poetry id read in the songwriting thread...but i dont so i dont...
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#39
Quote by goods2006
Hey for the first time since I have ever been in a discussion involving you in these forums I actually agree with you.

*also bangs head against wall*.




what were the other times?

Oh well, happy banging
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#40
this is dumb....sure a little corny but hes expressing himself!!! He will get better! Hes your little brother!
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