#1
Hello, I'm Not Here

Hello, I’m not here right now
And if I was, I’d be too busy
I’m gonna take a shower,
And drive into the city
Always, there’s my songs
That I just put on the shelf
You know they’re all about you,
And they won’t write themselves
So I’ll call you back, I promise
You know I never lie
Except when I say I love you
And when I kiss you goodbye
My conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
No my conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
And you’re standing there
Drenched in kerosene
With your cheap clothes
And stupid grin
And I hate you more than I ever did
Than I ever did before
So I’ll call you back, I promise
You know I never lie
Except when I say I love you
And when I kiss you goodbye
But my conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
I’m not that kind of girl


yeah. c4c
darkangel322
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#2
So I’ll call you back, I promise
You know I never lie
Except when I say I love you
And when I kiss you goodbye

I LOVE IT! Especially that one part. There are no real flaws here. Great song, great meaning and terrific wording.
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#3
Quote by darkangel322
Hello, I'm Not Here

Hello, I’m not here right now
And if I was, I’d be too busy
I’m gonna take a shower,
And drive into the city
Always, there’s my songs
That I just put on the shelf
You know they’re all about you,
And they won’t write themselves

till here i liked it

So I’ll call you back, I promise
You know I never lie
Except when I say I love you
And when I kiss you goodbye

really good reminds me of my ex- girlfriend


My conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
No my conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
And you’re standing there
Drenched in kerosene
With your cheap clothes
And stupid grin


last line hampers to flow a bit


And I hate you more than I ever did
Than I ever did before
So I’ll call you back, I promise
You know I never lie
Except when I say I love you
And when I kiss you goodbye
But my conscience isn’t heavy
I’m not that kind of girl
I’m not that kind of girl

i wont change anything over here


yeah. c4c
darkangel322



overall i liked it. sort of a cliche topic to write about but you wrote it pretty well

crit mine if you can

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=535339
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#4
and you say you suck at writing...... HAH hardly.. i love it almost as much as you=) lol pce
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