#1
Ok so I figured I would post some of my work. C4C.
Hope you enjoy.


Verse 1
It's starting to take it's wear on me.
Right now wrong is all that I can see.
Taking it slow was never possible with you.
I thought I knew you, but I don't know who.

Chorus
Right now I need to just get away.
I'm so sorry it had to end this way.
I'm not giving this anymore time.
If we stop this now we might just be fine.

Verse 2
We we're so close but always far away.
Give it some time but it's still where we stay.
We lost who we are inside ourselves.
We lost who we are in something else.
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But last time I cranked my amp up. A small bird flew by at the same time I did a pinch harmonic.... and it exploded....



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#3
Quote by sumfears
Ok so I figured I would post some of my work. C4C.
Hope you enjoy.


Verse 1
It's starting to take it's wear on me.
Right now wrong is all that I can see.
Taking it slow was never possible with you.
I thought I knew you, but I don't know who.

last line 's a bit odd . try rewoeding the whole phrase

Chorus
Right now I need to just get away.
I'm so sorry it had to end this way.
I'm not giving this anymore time.
If we stop this now we might just be fine.

chorus is best from all the piece


Verse 2
We we're so close but always far away.
Give it some time but it's still where we stay.
it's a bit forced
We lost who we are inside ourselves.
We lost who we are in something else.


some of the lines are forced and bit odd . try rewording the verses and next time plz leave the link of ur piece
Hi
#4
Well it's wrtten in 5/4 time. That might help when reading it.
There is a link in my Sig.
Quote by Metal-X
But last time I cranked my amp up. A small bird flew by at the same time I did a pinch harmonic.... and it exploded....



Too Late