Poll: the clash of the beloved childhood characters.
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View poll results: the clash of the beloved childhood characters.
blue.
10 59%
red.
7 41%
Voters: 17.
#1
Distractions.

Lately, I find myself looking for distractions from everything in my life. In fact, right now, there's nothing I dread more than being left alone with my thoughts. My mind wanders into places that I wish it would never go; places that make me choke on all the words that I'm just dying to say. And I don't know how to fix it. I've tried tying up every one of my thoughts with nickel strings and film reels. I've tried painting them all white and I've tried scribbling them all out. I've tried just about everything I can think of to distract myself from this somber room, but they're all so fucking temporary, and I'm just so fucking restless to get my mind away from the god-awful places that it wanders to when I'm left all alone with my thoughts; the places that are always lit by nothing more than the dim, haunting glow of a crescent moon. And I can't stand living at night anymore. I need the sunlight to wash over my cataracts. I need the fucking rain, the snow and the wind to lick at my wounds until they've been sterilized. I need something more than just an empty room and a canvas that I've painted over a thousand times, because when I'm left with this painting full of so many glaring mistakes and the sloppy jobs I've done in an attempt to fix them, it reminds me of the fact that I'm just going to make each and every single one of those mistakes a thousand times again. It just reminds me that no matter how many distractions I find from this overworked canvas, there will always be those fucking mistakes and their clumsy cover-ups to guide me back to all those cold and tired places that are lit by just a crescent moon; all those places that make me choke on all the words I'm just fucking dying to say.



Edgar's Nocturne

And now, ladies and gentlemen
I present our critically acclaimed
lobby musician, ,
who will be performing
a Nocturne by Chopin.


After arriving at work, I became determined to finish a day's work without a hitch. I'm sick of the pressure constantly being put on me, so I won't give them a reason to. It's time to finally concentrate and get things done on time and well. So when Isabelle cracked a joke about some nonsense, I had begun to laugh, but then realized the ritenuto and made sure to ignore the comment.

Kind of seems like clockworks, don't it?

I agree, sir, it surely would seem that this rendition was lacking rubato.

I just want to sleep forever.


Last edited by Grovermans at Mar 4, 2007,
#3
edit: oh, and are we doing this for points? i personally would rather not, but if you want to, preferably lower points.

edit: i put it in your thread, mang.
Last edited by punchupatatigge at Mar 4, 2007,
#4
no points is fine for me.

EDIT: oh, and i vote red.

EDIT: also, the link to the thread is in my sig.
i wouldn't mind getting a bump on it haha

I just want to sleep forever.


Last edited by Grovermans at Mar 4, 2007,
#6
The second one had some grammatical issues, i think, and could have flowed a lot better imo.

Coincidently, my name is Edgar but I voted blue anyway.
#11
blue was much better, but where's the need to say **** before everything? you can say it once, but not like 5 times. after awhile it just drains the flow from the peice and makes it sound bad, kills the flow.
when im with you, there's nothing I wouldn't do, i just wanna be you're only one. im gasping out of straws, taken aback by what i saw that night before when we were all alone...
#12
i disagree with that statement, plus182. i thought the profanity added to the piece, although in one case it may have been overdone. other than that, it seemed like a legitimate rant.

edit: the profanity made it sound like a legitimate rant.
#13
good match grov, let me know if you want to do it again some time. preferably not any time soon though.