#1
hey everyone, ive seen alot of brilliant lyrics and prose in these forums, so i thought i'd give it a try. Im only 17 but having a shit time at the moment so heres my thoughts....

The End Forever

She said,
'We can't save this anymore',
But I don't think you trying,
Say them words again but,
This time like you mean it

Slide your hand,
Across the table
Just as I lose my grip on you
You created a scene
But don't mind me

Chorus
Keep hoping, (Keep hoping)
It's all we've got to hold onto
Where lonely tears fall in lonely places
This is not a secret
It's a scar

Hold my breath,
To stop me from going under
When everything around us is broke
Give your sympathy for free
But your love will cost me deep

I never said
This was going to be easy
Your eyes as heavy as your heart
A rush of blood to the head,
A photograph of someone dead

Chorus
Keep hoping, (Keep hoping)
It's all we've got to hold onto
Where lonely tears fall in lonely places
This is not a secret
It's a scar

I've learnt from my mistakes,
Have you learnt from yours?
Heres my head at you feet,
Face down on the floor (x4)
#2
Generally I'm a bastard and tend to point out a few faults.


However.


I really like this. I present nothing wrong. The flow is great. The tone is great. I really like it. I love the last line. There are a couple other small parts I really like. Good job man.
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