#1
Ok, I didn't have a clue what to name the song, and this song is based around a rise against song named "my life inside your heart" so I thought i'd name it the same, yes I may have ripped it off, if someone can suggest better feel free, but I feel the title sums up the song. I'm proud of this one and it's about a girl I have liked for ages Crit for crit like usual...I'm gonna put guitar to this too so I'm hoping for a few decent critiques if any one is kind enough. Cheers in advance! x

My Life Inside Your Heart

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Time again I've found myself crying head into my hands
Your cries out loud echoe with the attention that you demand
You're a test i'll never fail but there'll always be a mark
A mark I miss while suffering eyes searching through the dark.

(Chorus 1)
"Why aren't we moving?"
"I've spent my time numbing in these places"
We spent all of our times believing yet we're
Wishing that we weren't what we'd become
The transition's never ending
But I'll never make the same mistakes as some.

There's too many intentions and promises impossible to extend
I've picked up all the pieces to find that they still won't mend
There are many exciting breakthroughs but nothing to set apart
Our lives together or just mine inside your heart.

(Chorus 2)
"How will this be ended?"
There's way too many unanswered questions
No one ever thought they'd have to tend to
We're the ones always leaving empty-handed
With nothing else to gain
'Cos we're taking too many chances.

(Bridge)
Everytime I've seen you
All our past times flashed right before my eyes
Everytime I touch you
I feel so much more alive.

(Chorus 3)
"Why aren't we moving?"
"I've spent my time numbing in these places"
We spent all of our times believing yet
We're the ones always leaving empty-handed
With nothing else to gain
'Cos we're taking too many chances.

(outro)
So our lives struggle on
With gasping air and arms held out in front
We've been taught and reconciled
To carry on without a sound
To dust ourselves down and to
Keep trying once again.
Last edited by Adam_Harrison9 at Mar 5, 2007,
#3
The title is a song by Rise Against. Im thinking thats why people wont crit it.
Originally posted by Knife2aGunFight
We're all different, we have different tastes. People hate people that are different, these people are racist. Racist against the scene. Scensist.....Sceneracist,........ Rascenesist.