#1
[verse 1]

Met this girl an she were right amazing,
Tall tall blonde with blue blue eyes.
A traditional beauty, if ya know what I mean,
She came right over, to my surprise.

Only problem is that she’s taken,
But a girl like that is hard to find.
You say she’s happy with her old boyfriend,
But there’s that look deep in her eyes.


[chorus]

Saying
Take me out of here,
I’m waiting for you, please release me.
Take me out of here,
Dull my pain and free my mind.
(x2)

[verse2]

I followed her into the distance,
Followed like she wants me to.
Blonde highlights fade in the darkness,
Leading nowhere, long lost view.

But just like I knew it doesn’t last long,
Cos pretty soon that girl is gone.
Gone like smoke and dreams a rumor.
Rumors of her. Now she’s gone.

[chorus]

Saying
Take me out of here,
I’m waiting for you, please release me.
Take me out of here,
Dull my pain and free my mind.
(x2)

the song is pretty fast, a bit of a romp, and sorta indie-alternative-ish

the main things i need views on are a new title, and maybe the song's a bit short, so advice on where to go with another verse/bridge, and of course any suggestions for changing whats already here are appreciated too!

just point me in the direction of any songs you want opinions on!

cheers
#2
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