#1
well i wrote this a little while ago and then gave it to my friend to change and it was alot less about sex than it has become after he edited it but i think its still pretty good. the ending is "lead singer (one backup) (the other backup)" all singing in unison.

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We sit in my room, in front of my TV
The black and white, you seem so pretty
Smile at me wonder why as time goes by
I smile back but inside im trying not to…

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here

Finally you turn around, is it time to go
Just a rush to the head not a single suck 'n' blow
Just the lock and a blur and now I'm in her
Push, push, push as she starts to…

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here

To be sure you don't get to thinking
That this love ship, it's been sinking
I whisper all I don't feel to you
And promise this fiction's all true
Just to get some
I gotta get some

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here

Just to get some
I gotta get some
(x2)

Turn off the screen and get on top (Just to get some) (Let's quit wasting time)
Don't tell me that you do this a lot (I gotta get some) (We both know we wanna ride)
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up (Just to get some) (Let's quit wasting time)
Please say you're not just another slut (I gotta get some) (We'll finish our beers and)
(x2)

Get the **** outta here

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Hope you enjoyed, crit 4 crit of course
#3
This song has some underlying sarcassim that just makes it work. Most songs about sex are nasty and cliche, but this one is great. There are a few points I would change however...

We sit in my room, in front of my TV
The black and white, you seem so pretty
Smile at me wonder why as time goes by
I smile back but inside im trying not to…

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut I would take out the "just" in this line. I think it flows better this way

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here Maybe you should change the "We'll" to "Let's" but it's not necessary

Finally you turn around, is it time to go
Just a rush to the head not a single suck 'n' blow
Just the lock and a blur and now I'm in her
Push, push, push as she starts to… I think that this verse lacks what the first one had. It does however paint a picture, but I wont go there

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here

To be sure you don't get to thinking
That this love ship, it's been sinking
I whisper all I don't feel to you
And promise this fiction's all true I would change this line to "And promise these lies are all the truth"

Just to get some
I gotta get some

Turn off the screen and get on top
Don't tell me that you do this alot
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up
Please say you're not just another slut

Let's quit wasting time
We both know we wanna ride
Let's quit wasting time
We'll finish our beers and get the **** outta here

Just to get some
I gotta get some
(x2)

Turn off the screen and get on top (Just to get some) (Let's quit wasting time)
Don't tell me that you do this a lot (I gotta get some) (We both know we wanna ride)
Sooner or later, you'll have to give up (Just to get some) (Let's quit wasting time)
Please say you're not just another slut (I gotta get some) (We'll finish our beers and)
(x2) I like the idea of repeating this hook twice and adding the background vocals. I would love to hear this recorded

Get the **** outta here

-- I really enjoyed your song. Like I said, I'd love to hear it recorded if you ever do. Oh, and check out my song "Shine" if you get a chance and tell me what you think; the link's in my sig. Anyway, good luck with this song. It's off to a great start.