#1
This is the song lyrics to my song too fast. it is a metal song so yeh comment me n let me no what you think


Verse 1
Your goin down a self destructive path
Its gunna end your life in a flash
Your abusing your body to no end
By throwing all these drugs in a blend
Its gunna kill you sooner then you think
This living life on the brink

Chorus
You live your life way too fast
You keep this up you aint gunna last
If you keep it up, youll lose your head
Or kill someone else instead

You live your life way to fast
You keep this up you aint gunna last
If you keep it up, youll lose your head
Or kill someone else instead

Verse 2
Pot, Coke, Ice and Speed
You’ve done all of these
You can’t keep living on the edge
Or soon you’ll end up dead
Think about the consequences
Or your gunna end up in pieces

Rpt chorus

Solo

Verse 3

Now you’ve got a decision to make
What path are you going to take
Keep up this pace and lose yourself
Or change your ways and keep your health
Just make sure you play your cards right
And maybe you’ll live another night
#5
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#6
^ Sorry to seem like an ass but the threadstarter is ok in this case, genre and title. Saying lyrics or poetry is ok.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
#7
Aw, my apologies. You're quite right. I do remember reading that.

Shucks, and I thought I was helping out
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#8
No worries you are man, its cool, thanks for doing so too.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
#9
Verse 1
Your goin down a self destructive path
Its gunna end your life in a flash
Your abusing your body to no end
By throwing all these drugs in a blend
Its gunna kill you sooner then you think
This living life on the brink
Maybe just "Living life on the brink"

Chorus
You live your life way too fast
You keep this up you aint gunna last
If you keep it up, youll lose your head
Or kill someone else instead

You live your life way to fast
You keep this up you aint gunna last
If you keep it up, youll lose your head
Or kill someone else instead
The flow is kind of lost with the last line...

Verse 2
Pot, Coke, Ice and Speed
You’ve done all of these
You can’t keep living on the edge
Or soon you’ll end up dead
Think about the consequences
Or your gunna end up in pieces
Not nuts about the second line. It's mostly just filler, and doesn't flow too well. I do really like the flow of the last couple lines though.

Rpt chorus

Solo

Verse 3

Now you’ve got a decision to make
What path are you going to take
Keep up this pace and lose yourself
Or change your ways and keep your health
Just make sure you play your cards right
And maybe you’ll live another night
I'm not sure if it's appropriate, depending on who the song's about, but I think "And maybe we'll be together anoher night" or something along that lines...

Just some ideas. I'm not too great at crits it seems. In general I liked it. Pretty plain, but it's a pretty plain message too.
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