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Here's something I wrote a while ago, I tried polishing it up a bit as per your suggestions (thanks v much btw) but I still don't like the first verse, any suggestions much appreciated.

Crit for crit?

Crying Now (edit)


Please, just pack you bags and go
I promised you would never know
I'll change the colour of my hair
And try to act like I don't care

When it came the time to say good-bye
I promised myself I would not cry
And I kept that promise
I don’t know how
But hell I know I’m crying now

The day you left I fell apart
He tried to mend my broken heart
But the pieces they just wouldn’t fit
Because you held the missing bit

When it came the time to say good-bye
I promised myself I would not cry
And I kept that promise
I don’t know how
But hell I know I’m crying now

I see you every other week
But now we barely even speak
You were special, I loved you so
More than you could ever know

When it came the time to say good-bye
I promised myself I would not cry
And I kept that promise
I don’t know how
But hell I know I’m crying now

You used to know me oh so well
Now it’s hard to for me to tell
If I’m the girl that you once knew
Or if I’ve changed because of you

The day you left I did not cry
I could not look you in the eye
And I kept that promise
I don’t know how
But hell I know I’m crying now

But don’t you worry about me
In a way you’ve set me free
To live the life I’ve always dreamed
It’s not as bad as it once seemed

The day you left I could not cry
Four weeks have just flown on by
I kept my promise
I don’t know how
Maybe I'll stop crying now
Last edited by Emzrock56 at May 4, 2007,