#1
"Women Stalker" (or "Eyes of a Stalker"),By Grinning Ghost. 3/9/07

(1.)I see her through window,She so beautiful.
Dressed in that tight dress,not for long.
I feel excited,looking through that window,your so
beautiful.

(2.)Got me feeling myself,can't stand it no more.
Your so beautiful,Seeing that sight through that window
your so beautiful,I can't stop looking at you.

(3.)I see through your window and I feel you.
I can't wait long I want you now but I know
You wouldn't.I know you, through that one
window.
(Chrous)
(4.)Got to find a way Yeah!
(Chrous end)
(5.)God you so pretty,I Can't my believe eyes once you
take that towards that one window.

(6.)I see you in school and I just know that you've been with other
girl,Cause I know.
(7.)(Chorus)
I'm a stalker girl,
I'm your stalker girl,Better watch for me.
Yeah!
(Chrous end)
(Repeat 3 through 7.)

Cause I'm out for you! Yeah!

(End.)

This is meant to be a simple song and really focus on the guitar and bass.This Song is not totally compelete and I need your crit to help me finish or decide if I should scrap it.Its pretty much my first Song.Its suppose to be a power metal song,It was inpired by Iron maiden.
Last edited by Evilsir at Mar 9, 2007,
#2
haha...nice. it reminds me of sting's "every breath you take". who doesn't love songs about stalking?
#3
Wait... are you the girl? Am I the girl? Pics?


haha, jk. "#5" Is worded weird, but if that's what you meant, then never mind. Overall, it wasn't bad. "#6" & "#7" need some work though. Is it supposed to be like a Stephen Lynch song or something?


Oh well, good luck with it.
#4
Quote by Guitarjunkie18
Wait... are you the girl? Am I the girl? Pics?


haha, jk. "#5" Is worded weird, but if that's what you meant, then never mind. Overall, it wasn't bad. "#6" & "#7" need some work though. Is it supposed to be like a Stephen Lynch song or something?


Oh well, good luck with it.


Thanks I'll owrk on them,It was inspired by Iron Maiden actually.
#6
Quote by Goalie Fight
i can definately see this playing better as an iron maiden style song. nice work

Thanks
#7
i do have 1 suggestion...pick a better title. something creative, but still implies stalking...like

i'm always there..watching

or something like that. eh, just a thought