#1
any critique is ok, good or bad. ( tell me if i should take out some of the big words)
c4c of course
thanks in advance


Nothing Changes

i woke up this morning
to find it all the same
nothing moved nothing changed
nothing ever changes when you sit here and decay

i dont know what will happen
my mind cant find a cure
it feels like there is nothing
i wish i could annihilate this complication
make this like a bagatelle

but...

but i cant and thats why its my weakness
i can make this sore go away
this day is the day i start and stop this decay
this is my home, but i find myself alone

i find myself sitting here
with nothing to do
nothing to make time go
it makes me feel alone
like a dog without a bone

nothing ever changes anymore
i need a modification
nothing ever differs, from day to day
its all the same
living it all over and over again

it makes me feel alone
like a dog without a bone
this is the day i start and stop this decay

spoken..
this day is the day i start and stop this decay
My Music
Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
Last edited by ihaterap101 at Mar 10, 2007,
#2
on the second verse tell me if i should get rid of the last 2 lines or change them, or keep
My Music
Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#3
anybody?
My Music
Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#4
this is a realy sad sounding song to me, i cnat write lyrics, but i think you should get some kinda chorus mabey use the part about:
i dont know what will happen
my mind cant find a cure
it feels like there is nothing
i wish i could annihilate this complication
make this like a bagatelle
#5
no bumping, crit others and link them, if they dont reply, PM them with a nudge.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.