#1
this is the first song my friend and i wrote ever
its a slow, acoustic ditty with some electric chorus modulation to round it out


two tickets to nowheresville
i hope you'll come along for the ride
i know you'll join me
i'm needin some company

hooo dont go without me

im gonna pack my bags
gonna find my place in the world
dont hold up
theres heaven on earth in nowheresville

hoo dont go without me

nowheresville
on the other side of the world
nowheresville
ive got two tickets

(coda, solo)

yeah theres no place id rather be
nowheres the best place for me

nowheresville
on the other side of the world
nowheresville
ive got two tickets
#4
I quite like it.

two tickets to nowheresville
i hope you'll come along for the ride
i know you'll join me
i'm needin some company

The last two lines are my favourite it doesn't really flow well till them in my opinion

hooo dont go without me

I don't really get how I can vrit this bit so oh well. It's good.

im gonna pack my bags
gonna find my place in the world
dont hold up
theres heaven on earth in nowheresville

My favourite stanza, apart from the second line stops the flow but I think it makes up for it in the third line.

hoo dont go without me

nowheresville
on the other side of the world
nowheresville
ive got two tickets

I just like the stanza although I would swap the second line with the first and the fourth with the third.

(coda, solo)

yeah theres no place id rather be
nowheres the best place for me

My favourite bit of the whole thing well done and keep up the good work
nowheresville
on the other side of the world
nowheresville
ive got two tickets
#5
thanks for the critique - if u ever post any other songs ill critique em for u 2