#1
All that i am,
all that i was before,
is never enough for you,
and never will be,
ego stays,
heart shatters,
leaving pieces,
killing me.

chorus
Lets leave this behind
burn our photos as we go
forget what we did before
and just move on with life

Those three over-used words,
dont mean a thing now,
we're not like them,
no, we are not,
we're just mere friends,
going thru a phase,
that i cant explain,
but i wish i could.

chorus

Lets leave this behind
burn our photos as we go
forget what we did before
and just move on with life

i dont know what you think of me
but your kisses and roses
means nothing to me
nothing at all

I used to have feelings,
cheerful, happy thoughts,
but now dark clouds are forming,
my heart's painted BLACK,
like magnets to sadness,
sorrow and numbness,
growing unconciously
through time and time again.. again again

chorus

Lets leave this behind again
burn our photos as we go again
forget what we did before
and just move on with life

i dont know what you want from me
but your kisses and roses
means nothing to me
nothing at all


i'll try not to think of you,
yeah love hurts
it kills me slowly inside,
yeah know i know,
now i know that your kisses and roses,
equal nothing
nothing at all,
you know who you are,
you know who you are..
Last edited by rafael90 at Mar 13, 2007,
#2
All that i am,
all that i was before,
is never enough for you,
and never will be,
ego stays,
heart shatters,
leaving pieces,
killing me.
I love it man. Very deep, very deep.


chorus
Lets leave this behind
burn our photos as we go
forget what we did before
and just move on with life
You are a god. I love the chorus. Wonderful.


Those three over-used words,
dont mean a thing now,
we're not like them,
no, we are not,
we're just mere friends,
going thru a phase,
that i cant explain,
but i wish i could.
I love how you think that the words "i love you" can get overused, and after a while, end up meaning nothing. Excellent.


chorus

Lets leave this behind
burn our photos as we go
forget what we did before
and just move on with life

i dont know what you think of me
but your kisses and roses
means nothing to me
nothing at all
I like it, it could be better. But it really flows.


I used to have feelings,
cheerful, happy thoughts,
but now dark clouds are forming,
my heart's painted BLACK,
like magnets to sadness,
sorrow and numbness,
growing unconciously
through time and time again.. again again
Wow. I found this the most descriptive of the whole song. Really great. I don't really like repeating the words "again," unless it's on echo effect.


chorus

Lets leave this behind again
burn our photos as we go again
forget what we did before
and just move on with life

i dont know what you want from me
but your kisses and roses
means nothing to me
nothing at all

No one believes me, your turning,
manipulating,
my thoughts twisted,
lost for word,
chocking, gasping, begging here,
screaming,
waiting for death to come.
The only thing I don't here, is I feel it's over-descriptive. I just don't like how you compare so many words to one thing. It's not bad though.


i'll try not to think of you,
yeah love hurts
it kills me slowly inside,
yeah now i know,
now i know that your kisses and roses,
equal nothing
nothing at all,
you know who you are,
you know who you are..
I love this part. I can't really see anything I don't really like here.


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All in all i think your song is AWESOME!!!

And i love the fact that the name of your song is K.A.R.E.N.
I remember seeing this thread a while back, and i remember that part.

I just think it's a bit too long for my tastes. But i could definately see it sounding great. Keep up the good work.
Wanna crit mine? In the sig

#3
i agree with YourMesiah666. best piece i've read so far
Q: What did the drummer say just before he got fired? / A: 'Hey, guys, let's try one of my songs!