#1
Verse
Calling all cars to the corner of fifth and main,
Last words were "Will it, will it ever be the same?"
A young girl with a spanish accent and bleached blonde hair.
Heres a quarter, alert those who care.

Chorus
What song will you whisper to sing yourself asleep,
6th and 18th was the promise we agreed.
She had eyes that were full of compassion,
While mine were still Missing-In-Action.


Verse
I dont care what Ms. V. says, I'd go more than 1000,
And just wait, in a few weeks we'll make amends.
I've got snow in my shoes, work overdue,
5 cd's new, just for you, just for you.


Chorus
Whose name will you write on the walls,
I know which one, just down the hall.
She had eyes that were full of compassion,
While mine were still Missing-In-Action.


Verse
Calling all cars again, same on fifth and main,
Now lies a boy with blood stained hair, triple L sweater,
Deja Entendu, he'll make it all better, he'll make it all better.
One more kaleidoscope, just sitting in the rain.


Chorus
Who will you call when your lungs don't let you breathe,
I know your not crying, it's just something in your eye.
She had eyes that were full of compassion,
While mine were just Missing-In Action.

Bridge
I'm not excpecting her to linger,
I'm not waiting with crossed fingers.
You can try for resistance,
But theres blackened stars in the distance,
Watching closely,
As you fall.

Chorus
I guess its no more breathing,
Or singing yourself to sleep
Writing on the walls,
I'll take care of it all.
She's still got those eyes full of compassion,
And mine are still Missing-In-Action.
If The Archers Bows Have Broken, Then I Hope To God They Know How To Fight.
#2
Thought I'd ust pop by and say this was a pretty solid, well written piece. No real major flaws. Not outstanding but a decent work here.

Like usual, if I remember rightly from your other posts. Hope you stick around
#3
I really like the way it just sits in my head. It doesn't take itself too seriously like alot of writers, and in today's song writing world that is a very valuable skill, great work.
#4
Thanks boys, I'm goanna try and get a few more crits on this...
And to Jammy, I'm going to crit one of yours anyway, just because I remember you lol.
If The Archers Bows Have Broken, Then I Hope To God They Know How To Fight.