#1
So this is the first original that I deemed worthy of recording. I still need to think of a bridge for it though... anyways it reminds me of Cake... (the band) oh well I'll crit anything you leave a link for...
BTW I played all the instruments in here, except for the fake drums

Link:
http://www.purevolume.com/bobdoleexperience

Crit for Crit
Gear:
Ibanez JS100
03 Squier Strat
1980 Ovation Matrix Accoustic
Peavey Valveking 112
Washburn T-14 Taurus (Bass)
SWR Working Pro 100 watt bass amp
#2
Definently sounds like Cake. There were some minor timing issues. I like your style though. You could maybe do something that would make it more unique and less like a Cake song.

Crit mine
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=543103
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#4
Yes! Cake is grand. I like the bass a lot. I'd add an acoustic guitar to the mix, if I were you, or at least work on differentiating the tone between the two electrics. Maybe make one clean or something. With some work, this'll be a very cool song.

And now for the crit for crit part.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=543735
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#5
Quote by NeptuneUK
^ Lol at cake!
Cake fan by any chance? It shows!!
Not bad for a first, just work on the production. It will come in time.

I like the stupid wobbley sound! But unfortunately I dont think it fits!


my latest: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=543693


stupid wobbley sound. is that the solo that I messed with the octaves around 0:55
or the whammy bar dive I did around 1:40
Gear:
Ibanez JS100
03 Squier Strat
1980 Ovation Matrix Accoustic
Peavey Valveking 112
Washburn T-14 Taurus (Bass)
SWR Working Pro 100 watt bass amp
#6
Overall I think you did great. I even listened to that other song before it, Its all good. Great guitar, strum pattern and even the drums were good :P