#1
alright, so this is my first time trying to write something meaningful. i've sat down for awhile and i got this junk. problem is, i don't know whether it reads nice, it should be in 2 different songs or something.

i would basically like opinions as to whether i suck and what i can do before i continue.


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i don't need to know you,
i already do.
just one of your friends,
but you don't have a clue.
cause when i look at you
and you're smiling at me,
i can help but to feel sad and blue,
cause i'm hopelessly in love with you.

cause it's torture,
when you're by my side
but it's heaven,
when i look in your eyes
you're here beside me,
you're also planets away.
and i'm never gonna be okay
when you don't feel the same way.

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anyhting is appreciated. thanks.
#3
please read the FAQ (found with the announcement at the top) before reposting this.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.