#1
Sorry if there are any spelling mistakes,please crit.Thanks


Verse1-
I've sedated bullets
'Cos they are all out to get me
I've slept with one eye open
And it keeps me happy

Verse2-
I've woken up dizzy
And pulled my hatered closer
I've watched my back everytime
And it keeps me ticking over


Chorus-
So if I should fall
You'd be the first one I'd call
You can save my soul

And if the night ends
With you stuck in my head
I wont complain
And you know how paranoid I am
You know how paranoid I am


Verse3-
I've got a certain poison
Running through my veins
Its pumped its way into my heart
I feel it as it aches


Chorus-
So if I should fall
You'd be the first one I'd call
You can save my soul

And if the night ends
With you stuck in my head
I wont complain
And you know how paranoid I am
You know how paranoid I am
Last edited by i_got_novacain at Mar 15, 2007,
#4
ill do a full crit later. it looks good so far
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silvertone acoustic

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#7
Quote by i_got_novacain
Sorry if there are any spelling mistakes,please crit.Thanks


Verse1-
I've sedated bullets
'Cos there all out to get me
I've slept with one eye open
And it keeps me happy

try cos they are all out to get me

Verse2-
I've woken up dizzy
And pulled my hatered closer
I've watched my back everytime
And it keeps me ticking over


i liked it don't change anything


Chorus-
So if I should fall
You'd be the first one I'd call
You can save my soul

And if the night ends
With you stuck in my head
I wont complain
And you know how paranoid I am
You know how paranoid I am

chorus is good

Verse3-
I've got a certain poison
Running through my veins
Its pumped its way into my heart
I feel it as it aches


wow really liked it


Chorus-
So if I should fall
You'd be the first one I'd call
You can save my soul

And if the night ends
With you stuck in my head
I wont complain
And you know how paranoid I am
You know how paranoid I am


overall pretty good. i liked it.

crit mne if u can.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=545253