#1
No intro. Take it as whatever you want. This will probably be my last piece posted here for a while.


I like to believe that being is made of pieces of bees

Behind the wallpaper, I like to believe there are pieces of bees,
Still alive, fluttering, pinned down with red pushpins,
Causing the hot air that rolls in swarms over my face the rare times I dream—
Like Fog.

Beside the bedside table, I like to believe there are pieces of bees,
Still alive, walking in hamster wheels, duct-taped to generators,
Causing the arms to strike twelve and send spider-man sheets billowing out of my fingertips—
Like Fog.

When I’m with you and I breathe, I like to believe there are pieces of bees,
Causing the, breeze to turn into, wheeze to turn into, trees to turn into.
Buzzing. Black. Buzzing. Drilling. Buzzing. Black. Buzzing. Drilling.
Panic. Buzzing. Manic. Bamboo outside my window creaking. Living stalks whispering—
Like Fog


When my hand is on your cheek, I may make a kind of ‘mmmmmm’ noise,
But don’t let that worry you; it’s just the bee’s way of showing
You that I'm real. And that the moment is incredibly alive—
Like Fog. Swarming, restless, living—
Like Fog.
Last edited by #1 synth at Mar 14, 2007,
#2
i just want you to know i loved it

the last stanza did it for me but there are some very cool ideas before that.

sorry for not critting it, just sharing my initial thoughts
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#3
Wow. Just wow. It was a little risky until the last stanza, and then those last couple lines made it all worth it. I'm not sure I have anything to say about this other than positives. I loved it, basically.

EDIT: Both links in sig. Easier for you to read my stuff.

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Last edited by Petey Cook at Mar 14, 2007,
#5
Anytime buddy boy.

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#6
Man I love your stuff.
Its trippy.
You remind me very much of early Andrew eldritch, Awefull singer, brilliant lyricist in my opinion.
Particularly of the song Body electric.

Through the cables and the underground
The faceless breathless calls
This is babel, sensurround
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
Too much contact, no more feeling
The sound around them all
Acid on the floor so she walk on the ceiling
And the body electric flashes on the bathroom wall
And the body electric flashes on the bathroom wall
Crawling to the corners where the idiot children call
See the body flashing on the bathroom wall

Through the cables and the underground
The faceless breathless calls
This is babel, sensurround
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
This place is death with walls
Too much contact, no more feeling
The sound around them all
Acid on the floor so she walk on the ceiling
And the body electric flashes on the bathroom wall
And the body electric flashes on the bathroom wall
And the body electric flashes on the bathroom wall
See the body flashing on the bathroom wall
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