#1
u can crit any of them, i mostly want people to crit the blues one.
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#3
I like the idea and rhythms and riff and all, they arent cliché or unoriginal
The lead guitar needs to be cleaned up a bit in my opinion, to me it sounds like you arent confident in what you are playing which takes away from the character of the song.

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#5
I listened to da blues, and it was alright, but it could have been much bluesier. I'd reccomend working on bending and some vibrato.
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#6
its ok i guess. some sloppy parts and out of tempo in some parts. you really need to practice more dude. maybe study some good blues licks. you really need to work on your bends and vibrato too. and the lead would have been faster..

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#7
Yeah man, like al said, you need to play more confidently. All in all, if you threw in some more bends, and maybe changed the key from time to time (especially in 'da blues') you could be making some really interesting music.

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#8
I listened to da blues.

Sounds good, IMO though you should play a little bit faster sometimes. It's good to have eights notes and resting on a note for a while, but you should throw in some triplets or sixteenths in some runs to spice things up.

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#9
da blues is pretty good. its a little slow though. it also is a little too clean. add some more vibrato and bends.
#10
Have some confidence about yourself man! Anyway, onto the track, it has a really nice slow feel, just kind of sliding a long. The playing is all tasteful, and nice bass-line. I think perhaps your a little too restrained with your soloiun, you could do with playing more expressively. Also it get a little repetaive as you stay one the same chord alth way through.

But good job, and it certainley doesn't suck.

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#11
i realy like this, im listening to your other songs now, theres not much i can crit on it. but im downloading it with prolly the rest of the songs in the folder, nice recordings
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#12
i listened to baltic sea. really cool. i listened to no bass only electric and drums. sometimes it seems that you dont have the right timing. a thing i got to learn too. how old are you? just want to know.
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#13
im 12,
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#14
not bad at all. i will say though, that to make your playing sound a bit more professional, throw in some vibrato on the notes that end your phrases. it just sounds a bit too plain. decorate your notes and phrases, and you'll be set to go.

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