#1
Back out of retirement in a van we ride,
Rollin' down the gravel on a countryside,
Washed upon the shore in with the tide,
Ice street, hybrid car, electric slide..

Glarin' from the sun light,
The moon is down,
Headed over to 3rd street,
The time is now.

Prowlin down the alley hood over my head,
Jabbed a player in the gut, bled out till dead,
3rd person I helped in to their death bad,
Claiming that my god was the one who lead.

Standin' in the street light,
They got revenge.
The time now spent,
Was in a hospital bed.

Exceptions were made for the hand I played,
All my friends came to where I laid,
I choked and I struggled and I called for aid,
Woke up from a coma of a couple of days.

Postin' in a spotlight,
Give it away,
Be careful for,
The hand you play.


What do you think of this one? I always critique back.
#2
um, your rhyming seemed to be forced to me


I choked and I struggled and I called for aid,
Woke up from a coma of a couple of days.


those 2 lines just don't seem right to me
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#6
damn that's a pimpin' title, tyte song, i still think the electric slide line is the best
#8
well i dont care really, i dont even listen to much rap. ill stab ur face with a sawdering iron if you even respond to this message man.
#9
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well i dont care really, i dont even listen to much rap. ill stab ur face with a sawdering iron if you even respond to this message man.

The threat would have sounded much more menacing had you spelled soldering correctly...
#11
I'm sure.
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#12
haha I can ban you for this thread...

oops my finger slipped.



soldering btw.
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