#1
the song isnt finished, one of my band mates wrote it one night and never got done but i think its a hell of a good start, tell me what you think


So dark, cant see your hand in my face
no light, cant cradle you, though i want to
its time, cant love you, though i need you
so dark - so dark - so dark

chorus

Nighttime in your head now
one shot and then your dead now
no sound, no voices reach you
find a way that i could breach you

chorus (cont) (could possibly be a bridge)

finding your crevice
its the hardest thing i couldnt do
breaking your confidence
its too late to hold onto you


thats all we have right now, what do u guys think?
Last edited by SolsApprentice at Mar 18, 2007,
#3
It's alright. To me, it seems to use alot of cliches, but its a good start.
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