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please tell me how you feel about them, and what i could change about them...


Leaves
After you have left me here
With the sweeping blow you have given
I learn to love the leaves to tears
And the grass, which it has hidden
The cool fall leaves crumble in my clenched hands
How I wish the leaves were you

In a way they are like you
Frail, delicate, beautiful and free
Of the mother that grew them
You’ve gone, fallen, from that tree
How I wish to be your color

You are the leaf that sits on the ground, not yet withered, or cracked
But still free of that branch
And it makes me wonder, am I still on the tree?
Or have I been crushed under the weight of a child’s boot
I only know that I am not next to you.

But in a way that is not true
You’re here you always are, burned into my mind
I forget to look through them
You love; I wish I could be that kind
You are, using all my time

I am so unsure
How could I be yours
I am so afraid
With time my mind decays

Change is the hardest thing
But you can change me anytime
And fall is the only time ill sing
Cause singin in winter is just a crime
The leaves are gone now when the snow falls
How I want them to come back

In a way they are like you
Frail, delicate, beautiful and free
Of the mother that grew them
You’ve gone, fallen from that tree
How I wish to be your color
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In a way they are like you
Frail, delicate, beautiful and free
Of the mother that grew them
You’ve gone, fallen from that tree
How I wish to be your color
^^^^
thats my favorite part
overall i like it reading it some of the lines seem awkward reading it but tahts ok not bad