#1
Hi everybody! (Hi, Dr. Nick!). Just a simple one today to make a change from all the tedious 'epics' I've been writing. No need for any full crits just a comment will do, thanks, I'm not that bothered.

Trouble's got me runnin,
But life keeps comin,
I'm happy and I don't know why.
My son said, Daddy,
Nothins gonna break me,
I'll shout it to the clear night sky.

I've got a song,
I'm gonna sing,
Ive got a song to sing around the world.
I've waited long,
For you,
Oh, baby won't you be my girl.
Over time,
I have learned,
Life is too much to waste.
There's a sound,
I heard,
People rocking around the world.

People just use me,
Others just lose me,
But I don't really care at all.
'long as I got this 6 string.
I can take anything.
The people, I keep rocking them all.

I've got a song,
I'm gonna sing,
Ive got a song to sing around the world.
I've waited long,
For you,
Oh, baby won't you be my girl.
Over time,
I have learned,
Life is too much to waste.
There's a sound,
I heard,
People rocking around the world.

[Solo]

Trouble's got me runnin,
But life keeps comin,
I'm happy and I don't know why.
My son said, Daddy,
Nothins gonna break me,
I'll shout it to the clear night sky.

I've got a song,
I'm gonna sing,
Ive got a song to sing around the world.
I've waited long,
For you,
Oh, baby won't you be my girl.
Over time,
I have learned,
Life is too much to waste.
There's a sound,
I heard,
People rocking around the world.
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#2
This song is very fun. I think thats what you were going for. I like how it tells about all you need is your guitar to be happy, and I think most people probably feel that way on UG. Good language. Good Imagery. Just a good song in general. I've got one on the front page called "All Talk And No Hands (Mom)" if you wanna crit it.
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