#1
hows this sound for a chorus to a patriotic sort of hard rockish song?

i'll fight for my country
ill break down their doors
i might die in action,
but i might win the war

i might add another line or two, but does that sound ok?

thanks in advance
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make loud howling noises and throw your feces at them whenever they bring it up, I suggest that your GF does the same.
#3
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it sounds kind of like a verse more than a chorus but thats just my opinion


hmm, that might work too
thanks for your opinion
Quote by metaldud536
Because there is a bomb in the lasagna!


Quote by Kid_Thorazine
make loud howling noises and throw your feces at them whenever they bring it up, I suggest that your GF does the same.
#4
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hows this sound for a chorus to a patriotic sort of hard rockish song?

I'll fight for my country
I'll break down their doors
I might die in action,
but I might win the war If you want it to be really patriotic change it to 'But I will win the war'

i might add another line or two, but does that sound ok?

thanks in advance


Not really my style, I'm no patriot really - but this sounds pretty good to me. A short comment on the piece in my sig would be appreciated. Ta.
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#5
im realy hoping not to offend you or anything, but these lyrics just remind of the pro-war country songs by that toby keith idiot. the words arent bad at all, but the subject and presentation just reminds me of him in a very bad way.
#6
If someone is partiotic don't insult them for that. and just because you didn't like the toby keith song doesn't mean it's not good(not my favorite of his myself, but not bad). Maybe some people are patriotic and love america and want to sing about it.

About the song I also think that sounds more like a verse than a chorus.