#1
I own you
Your mind and your pain
I own you
Your broken heart
I feel it with you

Stop screwing over
****ing over
Stop screwing me over
****ing me over
I feel it with you

I own you
Your house and your car
I own you
Your broken heart
I feel it with you

Your screwing over
Your ****ing over
Your screwing me over
Your ****ing me over
I feel it with you

You own me


Got any tips/help or anything like that very much apreciated.
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#3
thanks jerk
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alucardmik is actually from the outer rings of jupiter and likes to drink goat milk while rubbing his nipples counterclockwise. so i hear...
#4
Maybe use a bit more description. "mind and pain" are very general. It's a little simple for my personal tastes, but all in all, it isn't bad by any means.
#5
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thanks jerk


Fair play, it was a bit of a wannabe mod elitist and snobbish way to say it, but that's not a cool way to behave.
#6
someone helpful hooray! thankyou very much i shall pull out a thesauras
Quote by Nor'Easterbass
alucardmik is actually from the outer rings of jupiter and likes to drink goat milk while rubbing his nipples counterclockwise. so i hear...
#7
[6WS i meant]
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alucardmik is actually from the outer rings of jupiter and likes to drink goat milk while rubbing his nipples counterclockwise. so i hear...