#1
Here is my eerie acoustic/ piano instrumental, its not completely done yet, but i would like some feedback on it so far crit4crit

edit: ive updated the song, hope its a bit better
Attachments:
Sinforsale3.zip
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Last edited by Sinforsale at Mar 24, 2007,
#2
You might wanna try something other than crotchets....
#3
Im sorry but i dont know what your getting at

*confuzzled*
:S
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#4
Quote by Tranx
You might wanna try something other than crotchets....


lololol...thats almost like crotch...=]


...anyways...

some of the notes seem out of place...and completely out of key...

i dont know if you were going for that but it did make it sound eerie...

the whole song is quarter notes(crotchets ;])...and it kind of seems like you just threw notes wherever and saw what you came up with...

its not terrible...i like odd eerie stuff like this...but its pretty sloppy...

oh...and uh...the unfinished bars drove me insane...please use rests or longer note durations next time to keep my sanity in order...

ehhh...i give it...like a....4/10

not terrible...but...definitely not perfect...well i guess thats obvious...but...

oh look at me rambling....

anyways...next time try to keep the song in key...maybe try some more complex rythms...and finish your bars...for my sake...

there were also some awkward pauses...

ahhggh...im sorry...im done rambling...its not like i know what im talking about anyways...
Last edited by Checker at Mar 24, 2007,
#5
I'm wondering why the bass is a guitar. But I agree with everyone else that the straight quarter note rhythm got boring and bland. I do enjoy the creepiness in some parts, but it was just bland in other parts. I liked the guitar in bars 20-24 a lot.
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#6
thanks for the input guys
We're Composing our funeral songs, note by note

Let the carcass of the martyr burn