I like it, especially the well, phrase sort of thing "Rose tinted world" The lyrics flow quite nicely, i wouldn't be too worried about structure if i were you. What type of song is it going to be? I like the metaphor you used with the empty cup and everything. Overall good song, can you crit mine please?
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i really dont know about the musical style - ill be working on that later. Cheers for the constructive crit.