I'm practicing in writing songs.
these are my first sentences ever wrote I wrote.
(it sounds much beter with music and intonation, but now I'm laking about
the meaning of the words)

She shot me with her eyes,
failed hiding all the lies
a killing look that brought me down

The last page in our story
a neverending glory
that's ending on an unkown time.

Good ? Bad ? what can I do better...