#1
This is a song that I wrote over the last few days. It's my first original. It's a standard blues. Leave me some comments and some stuff you've worked on so I leave some comments for you.

Thanks,

Marc

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"If my baby don't love me no more,
well I'm sure her sister will." -Jimi "Red House"

Gear
1983 Strat '57 Reissue
1964 Gibson ES-330
Dr Z Maz 38
Fender Pro-Junior


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#2
good vocals on it. ive never found the courage to sing in my songs haha. good written lyrics too. and i like the solo, it wasn't too ordinary, yet it kept the flow goin'. i hear SRV in your playing, keep it up bro. the only thing i would do is try and add some more instruments to thicken up the sound of it all. drums are a must of course haha. but awesome job man.

crit mine?
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=548074
#4
I love it. it has a very relaxing feel to it, makes me think of really early blues like Robert Johnson and Muddy Waters. Some drums would would add to the song, and so would some lead lines during the verses. Good stuff overall, though.

EDIT: How about adding a harmonica solo?????
#5
Thanks for the feedback. I'll work on getting to all of your stuff today. I would like to get more instraments into it, but it's just me in a one bedroom apartment. Hopefully I can get some more people together. Thanks again.
"If my baby don't love me no more,
well I'm sure her sister will." -Jimi "Red House"

Gear
1983 Strat '57 Reissue
1964 Gibson ES-330
Dr Z Maz 38
Fender Pro-Junior


myspace.com/marcrobertwork
#6
Vocaks were a little off one the first line but soon sorted themselves out. Classic blues lyrics as well. The rythm is good but there is too much of a pause between between chord changes. Also it is very generic, the 12 barre blues progression and the classice blues riff thingy. The solo was good but nothing special. I think you need to add a few more instruments to make it more interesting and maybe put something more different to give it more of an edge.

Mind giving mine a quick listen? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=545043
#7
your song was soooooo chiiiiil. you were a bit of on the SRV song, but you sounded right at home with the song you wrote yourself. you might wanna try working on your tone. add a bit more reverb, and some mids to give yourself a punchier more focused sound. all in all i could listen to that shit all day man. 7.5/10 mostly because of the tone.

crit mine?: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=552712
#8
56goldtopdude I appreciate the suggestions on tone as being an SRV fan I know it is important. Unfortunatly I'm in an apartment and can't turn my amp up past 2. Plus it has no equalizer on it. Maybe I need an equalizer pedal, some reverb and a place to crank it to get a better tone out of it. When it's turned up it sounds nice. Thanks for the Info.
"If my baby don't love me no more,
well I'm sure her sister will." -Jimi "Red House"

Gear
1983 Strat '57 Reissue
1964 Gibson ES-330
Dr Z Maz 38
Fender Pro-Junior


myspace.com/marcrobertwork
#9
Hey the blues!!! Blues are always cool, and you know what? Polish doesn't make the blues, FEEL makes the blues

I like this, you have a really nice voice and the lyrics were good. I also like the solo, it's SO easy to over elaborate these things but you did it just nice.

If I have one gripe I'd say it'd be nice to hear some funky little fills now and again to break that rhythm up a little, know what I mean? Altogether nicely played, sung and recorded - the solo suited it perfectly.

I've done a cover of "Love In Vain" you may like...but my most recent track is "Wemdu" - have a listen if you have time.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=553188 (my song thread)
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