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Okay, so I posted a instrumental here a little while ago, and after taking on your crits.. I endeavoured to fix it.

I couldn't.

But I ended up starting a whole new song.

I think it's better than the last one.
What do you think?

I'll crit for crit.

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Last edited by bradbradbrad at May 25, 2007,
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I really liked it.

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LOL ! muther fuker i was gonna say that LOL!
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As did I. Some parts are better than others, but as a whole, it's good.
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Damn, this is some quality Metal. The part at verse 6 and 7 freaking owns. I think you could add some vocals to this, this deff. has metal anthem written all over it.
Deff. try to add some vocals, I think heavier songs like this are better suited for vocals than slower songs. I deff. love the solos, and theres so many of them. Good stuff man, the bass interlude-type thing is sweet too. I do think you could have ended the song a little differently, maybe end it with a solo playing on top of the verse.
Good stuff overall man, 8.5/10.

Crit my newest one plz?
the first one on my signature. thx
Join date: Jun 2006
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intro solo was great but the bends sounded off? the riff at ten was a headbanger for sure and a 17 then the solo was great i liked the descending sweeps they sounded awesome.

the riff at 38 was genious and the riff after it definitely teh best riff in it really enjoyable man kept me interesting teh whole way through