brodo_boosh
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#1
I wrote this when half asleep late this morning because i couldn't get to sleep. The lyrics are inspired by Devendrea Banheart and I wrote this for my friend Laura. Still needs a chorus and some more lines, a title to, so suggestions will be apreciated.

EDIT: there we go chaps, I've changed the name. It shall now be forever nown as *drum role* Laura's song.
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Theres a killer in your house and he's got a knife
I'll swin from the tree's to save your life
There's a murderer aswell and he's got a gun
Don't worrie I'll think of something hun

You tripped over and hurt your knee
Don't you worrie I'll come and see
Then a dog came and jumped on you
It doesn't matter I'll sort that to

Laura now youv'e gone and sold your soul
But I don't care if your heart aint cold
Now youv'e gone and got yourself in debt
But I knew you were broke since the day we met

Now youv'e ran away an joined the circus
But I'll get you a job with all the nurses
You got amnesia and don't remember me
Maybe some roses will refresh your memory

You went downtown and got yourself mugged
But Laura all you need is a big old hug
While youwere there you bought yourself a car
When you learn to drive we can go far

Yesterday you snapped and killed your brother
But that don't matter if we've got each other
Then you decided to burn my guitar
But I still love you more and more
Last edited by brodo_boosh at May 29, 2007,
Hdap101
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#2
Laura sounds screwed up.
Very nice if you're going for the stye of DB acoustic folk.
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brodo_boosh
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#3
Quote by Hdap101
Laura sounds screwed up.
Very nice if you're going for the stye of DB acoustic folk.

Lol, it's fiction. The message I wanted to portray is that whatever happens she's still got me.
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#4
Strong meaning behind it. Some of the lyrics are pretty ridiculous, sorry to say that, but "then a dog came and jumped on you" befuddled me.
Anyway, I like the meaning behind it, which gives it a 7/10

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brodo_boosh
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Quote by dann_blood
Strong meaning behind it. Some of the lyrics are pretty ridiculous, sorry to say that, but "then a dog came and jumped on you" befuddled me.
Anyway, I like the meaning behind it, which gives it a 7/10

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This one befuddled you?
Read the other one, in my sig
Last edited by brodo_boosh at May 29, 2007,
brodo_boosh
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#7
I dpn't really think that was what I was going for in terms of meaning.... but I'll think about it...
I was thinking of calling it Laura's song
opinions?
Last edited by brodo_boosh at May 29, 2007,
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#8
dude, i think laura would work just fine. I find this to be kind of a romantic/comedy poem. It sound like you guys have a great relationship.
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brodo_boosh
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#9
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she's a fun person. We have competions to see who can wrote the best novel about a curtain rail and stuff, so i wrote this in a comic style.