North East's Joke Club
Join date: Jan 2006
128 IQ
Heres a slower song tha i just wrote. Its just the music so can you try to refain from saying that it i repetitive cos that will change when i get some lyrics and a proper structure to it. The endings not there either but can you just crit on whats there please. Cheers
Sunderland AFC
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2006
744 IQ
The clean parts were actually pretty cool, but the chorus was a little plain without at least some drums. I also wasn't too fond of the little solo right after the first chorus. It almost sounded like the guitar was out of tune. You need to stay in the same key for that.

Crit mine?