Captian Xero
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Join date: Apr 2006
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#1
Yeah... I've been working on this one all day... I dare say this is my masterpiece...
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Last edited by Captian Xero at Jun 4, 2007,
ak Gitaroo Man
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#2
It sounds kinda repetitive IMO. I think you should vary some of the chord sequences and melodies just a wee bit in particular the part around 0:52 ish. Kinda epic.
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#3
I really enjoyed that. I thought it was well written and sounded good. I wouldn't call it EPIC until towards the end, but still a very good peice that would serve as an excellent intro to an album.

9/10 because as Gitaroo man said, some parts get a tad repetitive.

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Captian Xero
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#4
I'll take the advice and change a few things... I'll post an updated version tomorrow.
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#5
to be honest, it was incredibly boring.
there were no interesting chords,
no interesting riffs, and no variations.
it lacks a real structure, and as a result,
it ends up feeling like one long, drawn-out,
boring riff with a tired, cliche progression.
it's also WAY too short to be considered "epic".

sorry to be harsh; i'm just trying to be constructive.

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#6
Quote by Grovermans
to be honest, it was incredibly boring.
there were no interesting chords,
no interesting riffs, and no variations.
it lacks a real structure, and as a result,
it ends up feeling like one long, drawn-out,
boring riff with a tired, cliche progression.
it's also WAY too short to be considered "epic".

sorry to be harsh; i'm just trying to be constructive.


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I do agree with Grovermans, but length doesn't have much to do with epicness. I thought there were some definite interesting pieces in there.
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#7
jeez some harsh criticism above

i actually really enjoyed it, it was shorter than i thought it was goin to be which is good, would be great with some power metal vocals or even some rough vocals like the vocals in freebird. it was very enjoyable especially when it started to pick up speed. it would be nice to hear a recording of it but this has obvioulsy taken you some amount of time with all the different voices an all so well done

Captian Xero
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#8
I like the criticism... It's just a reality check on what I should be doing. I'm currently updating and revising some of this... although I'm not making any major change....
ctb
Join date: Apr 2004
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#9
I liked it when it started from lll. A longer version will be better I should think .
gonzaw
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#10
The intro doesn't sound too good in some parts....I think its due to the volume of the guitar or something like that.....
I really enjoyed it apart from that...I liked the other guitar in the beggining and the flutes
Part 3 is so great....I liked the lead guitar and the harmony
And then it calms down....its cool.
I like how you use the instruments and such....
I kind of took a surprise because of the distortion guitar at the end, but it was a nice way to end it.....

If you made it longer and made some adjustments in volumes and such.....it should be great

8.5/10
leo_p8
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#11
Meh... it's not epic... not to me, anyway.

I thought it was just plain bland... nothing in it to make it shine or jump up at you... just the classical progressions over the common backings with the same old drum loops...

Sorry, man... I'm being honest... perhaps the psychological factor got me, though... I read "Epic" on the title, and you said it may be your best work... and then it was like getting hit repeatedly in the balls with a sock full of quarters... not epic... just painful - and boring.

Don't take this as a personal offence... just my opinion on the song.

Best of luck.