hendo123456789
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Join date: Jan 2006
128 IQ
#1
Heres my latest piece. Please take the time to listen to it.
Will you especially try to get to the bits with the distortion guitar and tell me wht you think of the outro. I know its a long song but please
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Last edited by hendo123456789 at Jun 8, 2007,
rodrigomierh
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Join date: Jul 2005
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#3
i can see this is very November rain inspired, by the song structure , i liked it but it gets kind of repetitive, the outro lead bends are off at some parts, but may be just because of the midi. I think the solo at 122 its too simple and i didn't like that it had the same melody as the rhythm. the distortion guitar following the piano makes the song sound epic, i like the sound it creates. the other thing i didn't like were the strings rundown before the outro.

You better come with nice lyrics like in November rain, cause i can hear you really put effort in this one. 8/10 but just because there are some few things I didn't like, otherwise the song itself is well written. good job.
BerryTree
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Join date: May 2007
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#4
you used the november rain song structure...so i keep thinking november rain the whole time....its good but you should be more original. (Even the end is straight from the song man...)
JesseBlanchard
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#5
As others have said, sounds alot liek november rain. Not really my style of music so I sort fo foudn the acoustic and piano at the start boring, but once the distortion got in, it was good. I really lked the solos and the end was pretty good.

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#6
lol yea the piano's kinda boring... its just repeat.
it was somehow clipping on my headphones...
haha last part is stairway to heaven
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hendo123456789
North East's Joke Club
Join date: Jan 2006
128 IQ
#8
Thats foir all the crits so far guys ill get onto it all.Especially the lead outro and the piano
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hendo123456789
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#9
Ive updated it a little not much. Changed the solos and made a little modification at the end before the outro
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Last edited by hendo123456789 at Jun 11, 2007,
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#10
i liked it all except the ending of the first solo, it could use some work. and the 17-17-15-15 part of the second solo was too repetitive. other than that it was good.
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BerryTree
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#11
See...here my main concern about this song. What makes November rain a special song in general is the singing, and imo it would be hella boring without it...so yea this song is dragged Add a vocal melody to it and it would be better. (This is true for most ballads, the singing makes the song). Be more original, this sounds too much like November rain for me.... it just sounds like a poor mans version of it.
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#13
I agree Berry about adding vocals. It would improve it so much and round off the song giving it a focal point, however, I do understand that it's proper hard to come up with lyrics, or even just a vocal melody, so this is something you might take a long time over.
Overall it's very good, just needs something to add some variation, whether you go for the vocals or change some guitar parts. Nice work.
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