#1
This is a poem I wrote for a girl

In your arms

I can’t stop thinking of you
My mind is frozen
Inspiration takes me back
Silver lights blind me
Shadows blind me
You’ll be in my heart
Only you can make me cry and stop me from crying
Unending passion fills my heart with life
So many things were left unsaid
On the skies is your unending light
Many people have come into my life
Unexpectedly, so did you
Cherishing the time I have left with you
Here in your arms
#2
This is a poem I wrote for a girl

In your arms

I can’t stop thinking of you
My mind is frozen
Inspiration takes me back
Silver lights blind me----------This is a bit of a bumpy change in the piece.
Shadows blind me----------The word "me" gets a little tired here. I know you tried to do something with "blind me", but I don't think this is the place for it.
You’ll be in my heart
Only you can make me cry and stop me from cryingAnother bumpy change. There's also not much that's really poetic about this line, it's more a statement than anything.
Unending passion fills my heart with life
So many things were left unsaid
On the skies is your unending light
Many people have come into my life-------The word "life" gets tired here. It mucks the flow up a bit when you start a stanza (or section) off a poem with a word ending the first line, and then having that same word end the last line.
Unexpectedly, so did you
Cherishing the time I have left with you---------This line is weird. It changes POV and tense at the same time, which really threw me off.
Here in your arms


Overall, the flow seems very... off. Reading this, it seems just you just wrote raw feelings for the girl onto paper. Don't take this crit as negative or anything, the piece just needs a lot of work with the whole poetic flow.

-------Nick
So good to see you once again.
I thought that you were hiding.
And you thought that I had run away.
Chasing the tail of dogma.
I opened my eye and there we were .
#3
I can’t stop thinking of you.
My mind is frozen
Inspiration takes me back---where? Home, KFC, JFKAirport...
Silver lights will shadow me,
Shadows will blind me.
----Not great try what I put in or something similar.
You’ll be in my heart-This line adds nothing to the whole piece.
Only you can make me cry and stop me from crying-
Unending passion fills my heart with life---------------Ok, it gets better here.
So many things were left unsaid.
On the skies is your unending light---Word repetition kills a word.
Many people have come into my life.
Unexpectedly, so did you.
Cherishing the time I have left with you,
Here in your arms.


Ok I have put some punctuation where I thought you needed it, and the bolded lines are stuff I tweaked slightly.

I think the punctuation might have aided the flow a bit, but you are going to have to start counting those syllables and working out where stress lands on a word, so then you will find different patterns and have something decent, not like the averadge songwriter that rhymes bad with sad, and has to breath between each verse. C4C: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=608224&highlight=Block