#1
Hope I landed in the right place now, after I got lost in the wrong underforum or whereever. Didn´t mean to offend anyone. Anyway here comes the song

So long

we can not dance together
we hear two diffent sounds
we´re birds of a different feather
don´t try to turn the facts around


I know the naked truth hurts
clinging to lies makes it worse worse worse


we can not find a rhythm
we move to different beats
when we pretend what isn´t
we stumble over our feet


I know the naked truth hurts
clinging to lies makes it worse worse worse


so long now I´ll be gone
for me this dance is over though the music still goes on
this ends before it´s just begun
and now it´s goodbye it´s farewell and so long


I know the naked truth hurts
clinging to lies makes it worse worse worse
#2
This song is good =) it just needs a lil help flowing better and it kinda reminds me of the song "Helena" -M.C.R-
If you don't like me for who i am
then don't like me for who i am...
but all your gonna get is who i am.
#3
How about instead of using "worse worse worse" you use: "but clinging to lies just makes it worse."

That should make it flow much easier. Also, while this is minor, try can't or cannot rather than can not.