#1
This is a new song I just wrote called Darker Now. It's about feeling lost, but ultimately finding the place that your meant to be. Here it is...

Verse 1:
This road seems so familiar
I think they call it the path to ruin
I never thought I’d be a wonderer
But i don’t know what I’m doing

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

Verse 2:
The sun begins to rest it’s eyes
Midnight falls across the fields
But there’s a little spec of moonlight
To guide me to a place that is real

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

Bridge:
The people, their faces
The feelings, the places
The past, the traces
They aren’t what I used to know

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

Chorus 2:
It’s not so darker now
It’s not so darker now
It’s not so darker now
I’ve found a place to sleep tonight

...tell me what you think!

Anthony
#2
I like it! Its really cool
Look up these bands and you will see that christians can be metal too!

Demon Hunter
Zao
August Burns Red
will add more later!
#3
This road seems so familiar
I think they call it the path to ruin
I never thought I’d be a wonderer
But i don’t know what I’m doing

This verse seems to get sidetracked in the middle

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

In my opinion, too much repetition
Verse 2:
The sun begins to rest it’s eyes
Midnight falls across the fields
But there’s a little spec of moonlight
To guide me to a place that is real

I like this verse, I don't see any problems here

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

As I said before, I think it's too repetitive

Bridge:
The people, their faces
The feelings, the places
The past, the traces
They aren’t what I used to know

I like this part, simple yet effective rhyming

Chorus 1:
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
It’s getting darker now
But I still see a ray of light

Again, maybe it's me but i just don't like the chorus

Chorus 2:
It’s not so darker now
It’s not so darker now
It’s not so darker now
I’ve found a place to sleep tonight

Okay, I know I said I don't like the chorus a billion times, but I like your last sentence and then just having all the audio stop

Your song has good potential.

Could you crit mine for me, https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=611506
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#4
I really like this, it's simple yet effective. I like the sense of hope at the end, yet there's something about the line "It’s not so darker now" that just doesnt sound quite right grammatically, perhaps it's just me? Just a suggestion. Thanx for ur crit. x